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Screenwriting: "What the..."

I've been so busy lately that I've been working from the moment I wake to the moment I sleep.  I keep thinking the end of the workload is near... but it elludes me.  However, I've neglected the blog for a while, so I'm going to try to write some very short ideas (much to the celebration of many).

Here's a common scene in a scrīpt.

LINDA walks into the room, there is a bright ball of light in the center.

                      LINDA

          What the...When I was a reader, I read these moments so many times I had a little ritual where I would read it out loud. 

People don't do this.  It feels insincere.  And - the moment should say it all anyway.  You can just describe how "The light shines on Linda's face as she stares in awe."

There are maybe twenty of this very common things - and a hundred more which are common enough.  The important thing is not to have a list of them though and checklist to make sure you are not doing them.  The important thing is to be aware of the sincerity level of your writing.  Does it feel true?  Could an actor actually perform this moment?  Does the moment need dialogue or are you writing some dialogue forgetting that their face is on the screen and actors can exude emotions?

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Cokie - the answer to your question: It totally depends on the situation. Sometimes writers will be there everyday making adjustments to the script and writing future scenes for slight variations in what was shot verses what was scripted. Other times, the scriptwriter isn't allowed even close to the set. Completely depends on the director/writer relationship and the nature of the production.
over 17 years ago
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cool! love your work
over 17 years ago
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Sorica7 - That's a great question. It's not a true or false answer though. Everyone's job is to tell the story. As a writer, you are responsible to tell that story by essentially listing the "stuff that happens." You should absolutely avoid saying how that is covered because it's distracting and it could mean that you're trying to cheat - use some artifice other than the story itself to tell the story. In my example I say "The light shines on Linda's face as she stares in awe." that is absolutely a valid thing to write in your script because you're saying what happens - the light shine, Linda responds. If I said "We look down on Linda from a high angle as the light shines on her face." That would not be okay. Also if I said the light shines on her face and she "thinks that it reminds her of her childhood." - can't do that either because now that's inside her head - so how would we know that? Wow - that's making me think of one of those other totally dead solutions to a problem... the whole... "Linda holds photos from her childhood and nods..." Sometimes people try to get around the fact that they can't say what is in the characters head by trying to make a visual statement about it. Personally - I feel that solution is absolutely dead. You see it a lot. You shouldn't. It's the equivalent of playing charades with sign language. As a screenwrite all you do is arrange a bunch of stuff that hapens in an order which tells a story.the best it can be told.
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